tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post1639131798281445748..comments2023-03-27T09:45:31.174-05:00Comments on One Block: Her NeighborhoodMatt Merritthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-79377399099312983872011-05-22T10:35:40.492-05:002011-05-22T10:35:40.492-05:00Such a powerful image at the end. Great job! Now t...Such a powerful image at the end. Great job! Now though I want pie I have some rhubarb in the fridge lol<br /><br /> <br />My submissions are Nightmares and JealousyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-50824477882776016282011-05-21T13:54:26.969-05:002011-05-21T13:54:26.969-05:00What a great story, Matt. I agree with John that i...What a great story, Matt. I agree with John that it's more stirring than depressing. So much has changed, but a few things remain. Excellent job.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-28218021456737219122011-05-21T12:14:32.632-05:002011-05-21T12:14:32.632-05:00@John: Means a lot that it evoked some emotion. Th...@John: Means a lot that it evoked some emotion. Thanks.<br /><br />@Icy: Appreciate the kind words, and I'm happy you think the old/new descriptions ring true.<br /><br />@ibc4: Pace is something I really work on. That's a meaningful compliment. Thank you.<br /><br />@Virginia: Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.Matt Merritthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-60682873380693488432011-05-21T12:10:32.426-05:002011-05-21T12:10:32.426-05:00@Old Altonian: Such a nice complement! Thank you.
...@Old Altonian: Such a nice complement! Thank you.<br /><br />@Lee-Ann: I'm glad it didn't seem preachy. There were certainly bad neighborhoods in the "good old days," I'm sure. Places change.<br /><br />@Jessica: It is sad; I hope it redeems itself a little at the end!<br /><br />@rmpWritings: Glad you liked the mix!Matt Merritthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-52692547980690839742011-05-21T10:00:28.175-05:002011-05-21T10:00:28.175-05:00Fabulous piece. Really evocative.Fabulous piece. Really evocative.Virginia Moffatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12071059148315715405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-17551058881000539842011-05-21T08:35:35.629-05:002011-05-21T08:35:35.629-05:00The smells and colours were so strong, making the ...The smells and colours were so strong, making the recollections real.<br />Amazing control of pace, too. Excellent.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-36600165956482724972011-05-21T06:28:14.896-05:002011-05-21T06:28:14.896-05:00You've neatly captured the passing of time by ...You've neatly captured the passing of time by comparing the old neighbourhood with the new one. As John says, it's quite poignant.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-26880177300729520602011-05-20T22:21:18.081-05:002011-05-20T22:21:18.081-05:00Beautiful work, Matt. More poignant than sad. I ca...Beautiful work, Matt. More poignant than sad. I can see where people would fall into melancholy over it, but it's stirring rather than depressing to me.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-43719126233892931192011-05-20T21:05:49.864-05:002011-05-20T21:05:49.864-05:00i got lost in her reminiscing...really enjoyed the...i got lost in her reminiscing...really enjoyed the mix of here and now...loved the glimpse of hope that the past is not completely lostrmpWritingshttp://dontopendontthrowaway.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-76754488171478701912011-05-20T14:14:44.075-05:002011-05-20T14:14:44.075-05:00Sad, but hopeful. Well written.Sad, but hopeful. Well written.Jess PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10775984664764629241noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-90420327700101072102011-05-20T11:23:06.459-05:002011-05-20T11:23:06.459-05:00Grim yet hopeful... Stories like this sometimes co...Grim yet hopeful... Stories like this sometimes come across a bit "preachy" but you didn't fall into that trap at all. Beautifully written.Lee-Annhttp://leeannkhoh.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-18313158017370073932011-05-20T04:13:22.646-05:002011-05-20T04:13:22.646-05:00Nothing short of brilliant! Nostalgia for the pas...Nothing short of brilliant! Nostalgia for the past; dis-satisfaction with the ugly present, and then the redeeming little scene where little girls still twine flowers in each other's hair - a lovely story, beautifully written.Altonianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02841390371168941022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-55297373662738723712011-05-19T22:24:55.592-05:002011-05-19T22:24:55.592-05:00Really lovely piece, particularly the last part wh...Really lovely piece, particularly the last part when she sees the girls.Soniahttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-22154057535602063882011-05-19T21:43:08.349-05:002011-05-19T21:43:08.349-05:00@jaerose: That's a nice complement; I don'...@jaerose: That's a nice complement; I don't engage multiple senses often enough.<br /><br />@VL Sheridan: Thanks! I'm not totally sold on my transition toward the end, so that's nice to hear.<br /><br />@oldegg: I'm glad you think I captured that. Thanks.Matt Merritthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-55169699287022375712011-05-19T17:02:54.169-05:002011-05-19T17:02:54.169-05:00Hidden under the hideous dross of urban living the...Hidden under the hideous dross of urban living there are fortunately pockets of the past as you describe it so beautifully. On reading this I had that longing for the old days when childhood was such a delight. This is so well written.Old Egghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14727444489103758018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-70984391076569182252011-05-19T14:56:09.753-05:002011-05-19T14:56:09.753-05:00Yes, lovely blend of her memories with the reality...Yes, lovely blend of her memories with the reality of the present. The ending is top notch. Nice work.VL Sheridanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12831104283855298430noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-10767260901114989862011-05-19T13:18:49.637-05:002011-05-19T13:18:49.637-05:00Maybe hope is in people not the place..which like ...Maybe hope is in people not the place..which like all places must change..I could smell those pies..you gently yet powerfully brought us into Evelyn's world through sights, smells and dreams..moving and tender..JaeJae Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11509244123008832611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-70938504853152103202011-05-19T12:29:14.298-05:002011-05-19T12:29:14.298-05:00@Sheilagh: Thanks so much for reading.
@ThomG: I ...@Sheilagh: Thanks so much for reading.<br /><br />@ThomG: I didn't have much of Evelyn reminiscing at first. I'm glad you think it balanced.Matt Merritthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-90994912760989773582011-05-19T11:38:52.722-05:002011-05-19T11:38:52.722-05:00Really nice weaving of a story here. Great ending,...Really nice weaving of a story here. Great ending, and the bleakness of the new neighborhood really set it up well.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4307239433508983657.post-41137310140418332812011-05-19T10:01:23.971-05:002011-05-19T10:01:23.971-05:00Sheilagh Lee said: What a captivating story you wo...Sheilagh Lee said: What a captivating story you woven there. I loved every aspect of it and the ending where she saw the two girls lovely.Sheilagh Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13741333943021570641noreply@blogger.com